21st September
Time: 50min
Distance: *
av. HR: 147
kcal: 765
Where: City Beach to a line in the sand
Insights: A man of action sees nature and sits to write haiku
Sand is soft but makes
hard as are bosoms oh wait
that's not what I meant
Distance: *
av. HR: 147
kcal: 765
Where: City Beach to a line in the sand
Insights: A man of action sees nature and sits to write haiku
Sand is soft but makes
hard as are bosoms oh wait
that's not what I meant
posted by Anthony at Tuesday, September 21, 2004
7 Comments:
I'm not poetry expert, but Haiku has some rewarding formal conventions that are not very hard to follow. For instance, each line should present a different image. You should not aim for a 'choppy' haiku, but finishing a sentence on a different line *is* slack. IMHO, it would be better to break the syllables rule.
burying his toes
he compares nature to women
and starts running for home
But I'm sure there's a real haiku expert here...
Graciously taken, but a man of action is condemned to act. He cannot, as a great leader once said, return as a dog returns to its own vomit.
It is no surprise that a man of action is active, but that a man of literature be so literal.
ooh. come on, take the bait. i smell a haiku smackdown.
Hmmm a challenge, but a man of action tires of the poetry of sweet plum wine swillers and cherry blossom recumbents
There once was a young man of action
Who was was slowing by more than a fraction
As he sunk in the sand
He could soon understand
The solution was greater compaction
Dammit... I'm off to flame people with haiku elsewhere.
All around, no flowers bloom
Nor maple leaves in glare,
A solitary fisherman's hut alone
On the twilight shore
Of this Autumn eve.
~Fujiwara no Teika (1162-1241)
A man of action is grateful for the worthy challenge, man of no name. May we meet again one day for sonnets.
A man of action requests that he not be confused with an action man or copyright lawyers will swarm over him like bees to a jasmine flower.
A man of action may harden sand but compliments soften his heart.
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