Tuesday, September 21, 2004

21st September

Time: 50min
Distance: *
av. HR: 147
kcal: 765

Where: City Beach to a line in the sand
Insights: A man of action sees nature and sits to write haiku

Sand is soft but makes
hard as are bosoms oh wait
that's not what I meant

10 Comments:

Anonymous Anonymous said...

I'm not poetry expert, but Haiku has some rewarding formal conventions that are not very hard to follow. For instance, each line should present a different image. You should not aim for a 'choppy' haiku, but finishing a sentence on a different line *is* slack. IMHO, it would be better to break the syllables rule.

burying his toes
he compares nature to women
and starts running for home
But I'm sure there's a real haiku expert here...

1:51 am  
Blogger Anthony said...

Graciously taken, but a man of action is condemned to act. He cannot, as a great leader once said, return as a dog returns to its own vomit.
It is no surprise that a man of action is active, but that a man of literature be so literal.

7:06 am  
Blogger Santos said...

ooh. come on, take the bait. i smell a haiku smackdown.

1:54 pm  
Blogger Anthony said...

Hmmm a challenge, but a man of action tires of the poetry of sweet plum wine swillers and cherry blossom recumbents
There once was a young man of action
Who was was slowing by more than a fraction
As he sunk in the sand
He could soon understand
The solution was greater compaction

4:20 pm  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Dammit... I'm off to flame people with haiku elsewhere.

All around, no flowers bloom
Nor maple leaves in glare,
A solitary fisherman's hut alone
On the twilight shore
Of this Autumn eve.

~Fujiwara no Teika
(1162-1241)

4:47 pm  
Blogger Anthony said...

A man of action is grateful for the worthy challenge, man of no name. May we meet again one day for sonnets.

10:25 pm  
Blogger Robert said...

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11:14 am  
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11:16 am  
Blogger Robert said...

(Bah. Another formatting error.)

soft sand soon hardens
when touched by an action man
how could it resist?

11:17 am  
Blogger Anthony said...

A man of action requests that he not be confused with an action man or copyright lawyers will swarm over him like bees to a jasmine flower.
A man of action may harden sand but compliments soften his heart.

10:11 pm  

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